(Source image: "Into Tub" by Kathy Slamen)
She pulled the Moet and Chandon from the pretty cabinet. She poured a tall flute full and stepped into the tub. Exhausted and elated she relaxed down into the hot water. The candle’s glow was like the company of good friends. But she knew that there is only one way for more than one person to keep a secret and that's if all but one of those people were to die… she blew out the candles one by one.
(this is the 80 word version)
She pulled the Moet and Chandon from the pretty cabinet. She poured a tall flute full and stepped into the tub. She giggled as she contemplated a MySpace Status change. What would that say? Exhausted and elated she squatted down into the hot water. The hot water nipped at her sexy bits for a bit until she relaxed into it.
She thought back on the events of the night and how wonderfully it had gone. She had always had a thing for Bad Boys but this Bad Boy made her wet, wet to the knees. She had prepared the evening perfectly all the right stuff Rope, Ball Gag, restraints, special sheets, cling film, duct tape. She had wondered if he could be counted on to do his part and oooOOOhhh yesss his Bad Boy nature had not failed her.
She found her self becoming so excited by recalling the events of the evening that she could not help but attend to the feelings which were calling to her from between her thighs and from behind her now achingly hard nipples. She was almost ashamed by these feelings... almost.
She was proud of her accomplishments tonight. More importantly her mentor would be proud. Tomorrow Mr. Morgan would call on her and they would critique her work.
Secretly she wished the Bad Boy could have appreciated her efforts on his behalf... perhaps he had.
Tonight the candle’s glow was like the company of good friends welcoming her home. But she knew that there is only one way for more than one person to keep a secret and that's if all but one of those people were to die… she blew out the candles one by one and now her secret was safe.
(this was how it was intended but more than 80 words)
7 comments:
A nice way to do an end-run around the word requirement: do two versions. Lexi is fond of doing multiple versions as well, so, if your Muse demands more length, indulge her.
Have to say I prefer the 80 word version, though, with its hints of darkness and suggestions of mortality to come.
Thanks for playing!
-- PB
I like both versions but agree with PB in that I appreciate being left hanging every once in a while. Nicely done!
I really liked your take on the candles. Everybody seems to have done a great job this week playing them into their entries.
Happy FFF!
~Soren
The second version of the story was great, but the first one was excellent!
And I, too, liked your take on the candles : )
she is indeed a killer queen ;) cheers for this delightful story!
I have to say that I was more pleased with the mysteriosity (please don't shoot me for the Bush like word-smithing here) of the first. I imagine that every one got the Moet and Chandon reference just as sephanipaige did. I was so happy you mentioned it sephanipaige
Thank you again for all that stopped and took the time to comment.
I didn't get the Moet and Chandon reference. There, I admitted it. But I can't say that it detracted from the great bit about the candles, and I'm echoing the "liking the shorter version" crowd here too. Take that as a compliment, actually; it's not that we don't want you to go on, it's that you've pared the piece down to its essence, which is tough to do.
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